Blue Villanelle

ศิวสิโรมณิ

 
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Picture by Peter Essick
Further and further away I'm claiming my intention and say 'I'll stop flowing with the play' No more with being belayed It's the heart not the body, that I say Further and further away Like river that never replays I've followed, too long, along the way Now, I'll stop flowing with the play But still, looking afar, with a piece of ray But still, you're flowing, without delay Further and further away Just the time is needed as a pay Not in eyesight, nothing stay If I stop flowing with the play In time, red thread will be frayed Just memories are left to turn gray Further and further away I'll stop flowing with the play... Tuesday 8.34 p.m., January 29, 2013
ศิวสิโรมณิ
 

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Second Version Blue Villanelle

Further and further away, I’m claiming my intention and say “I will stop flowing with the play"

"No more with being belayed," It’s the heart not the body, that I say… Further and further away,

Like a river, flowing and never replay I have followed for too long… along the way… Now, I will stop flowing with the play

Please retrace…. deeply, I pray… Somehow, it’s just a dream that I portray, Further and further away

Time will drag us away From my vision, nothing stays If I stop flowing with the play

In time, red thread will be frayed Just memories are left to turn grey Further and further away I’ll stop flowing with the play…

Saturday 12.26 a.m., March 23, 2013

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  • Dao

    31 มกราคม 2556 17:16 น. - comment id 1254479

    To be or not to be
    The thought's clinging within me
    When will it go or to set free?
    
    Desire, Hatred and Delusion are spreading spree
    However, whoever may touch, smell, taste, hear and see
    To be or not to be
    
    Happiness, hardliness, outcome of the deeds come consequently
    Birth, death, rebirth, re-death are rolling to eternity
    When can we go and set free?
    
    Heavenly living're most people's wish and plea
    But, human being could rebirth as a flea
    To be or not to be
    
    Friends, lovers, families bind through the knees
    Passion, pride, love, fortune, prestige, praise ties through "me"
    How will they go and let "me" free?
    
    Eight noble paths were disclosed to all thee
    Mindfulness, selfless will lead all to glee
    To be or not to be
    Then all will go and set to free ...
    
    Thursday 17.31h, January 31, 2013
    
    
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  • ศิวสิโรมณิ

    31 มกราคม 2556 18:10 น. - comment id 1254483

    To: K. Dao
    
    Appreciated :) with your kind reply with this beautiful villanelle 36.gif36.gif36.gif
    I'm so glad that they're at least some people who read my poem, not just none 20.gif11.gif11.gif11.gif36.gif36.gif36.gif
    Actually, when I posted my poem that is entitled in English, only a few people will come and read it. 20.gif20.gif So I feel really glad every time I receive any reply for those of my poems.
    
    To: K. Dao and everyone who came here 
    I thank you very much for coming in and read my poem :)36.gif36.gif36.gif
  • Dao

    31 มกราคม 2556 18:20 น. - comment id 1254484

    Correction (2nd and 6th)  62.gif
    
    To be or not to be
    The thought's clinging within me
    When will it go or to set free?
    
    Desire, Hatred and Delusion are spreading spree
    However, whoever may touch, smell, taste, hear and see
    To be or not to be
    
    Happiness, hardly-ness, outcome of the deeds come consequently
    Birth, death, rebirth, re-death are rolling to eternity
    When can we go and set free?
    
    Heavenly living're most people's wish and plea
    But, human being could rebirth as a flea
    To be or not to be
    
    Friends, lovers, families bind through the knees
    Passion, pride, love, fortune, prestige, praise ties through "me"
    How will they go and let "me" free?
    
    Eight noble paths were disclosed to all thee
    Mindfulness, selflessness will lead all to glee
    To be or not to be
    Then all will go and set to free ...
    
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  • ศิวสิโรมณิ

    31 มกราคม 2556 18:23 น. - comment id 1254485

    Actually, I've just realized that my habit of thinking a line with 7~9 syllables from Thai poem (mostly, I write 'กลอนแปด', so it's kind of build this habit up insensibly) really did transfer to my English poem too.
    It can actually be seen in 'Blue Villanelle' which I've just realized about it after reread it again and again so many times.20.gif11.gif12.gif36.gif
  • Dao

    31 มกราคม 2556 18:30 น. - comment id 1254486

    Your English poem with Thai atmosphere is so sweet and smooth (to my Thai sense20.gif)
  • ศิวสิโรมณิ

    31 มกราคม 2556 18:31 น. - comment id 1254487

    Thank you 11.gif16.gif16.gif16.gif

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