Picture by Peter EssickFurther and further away I'm claiming my intention and say 'I'll stop flowing with the play' No more with being belayed It's the heart not the body, that I say Further and further away Like river that never replays I've followed, too long, along the way Now, I'll stop flowing with the play But still, looking afar, with a piece of ray But still, you're flowing, without delay Further and further away Just the time is needed as a pay Not in eyesight, nothing stay If I stop flowing with the play In time, red thread will be frayed Just memories are left to turn gray Further and further away I'll stop flowing with the play... Tuesday 8.34 p.m., January 29, 2013ศิวสิโรมณิ。…………………………………………………………………. 。
Second Version Blue Villanelle
Further and further away, I’m claiming my intention and say “I will stop flowing with the play"
"No more with being belayed," It’s the heart not the body, that I say… Further and further away,
Like a river, flowing and never replay I have followed for too long… along the way… Now, I will stop flowing with the play
Please retrace…. deeply, I pray… Somehow, it’s just a dream that I portray, Further and further away
Time will drag us away From my vision, nothing stays If I stop flowing with the play
In time, red thread will be frayed Just memories are left to turn grey Further and further away I’ll stop flowing with the play…
Saturday 12.26 a.m., March 23, 2013
ศิวสิโรมณิ 30 ก.ค. 2556 15:38 น. - ID 146552 
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31 มกราคม 2556 17:16 น. - comment id 1254479
To be or not to be The thought's clinging within me When will it go or to set free? Desire, Hatred and Delusion are spreading spree However, whoever may touch, smell, taste, hear and see To be or not to be Happiness, hardliness, outcome of the deeds come consequently Birth, death, rebirth, re-death are rolling to eternity When can we go and set free? Heavenly living're most people's wish and plea But, human being could rebirth as a flea To be or not to be Friends, lovers, families bind through the knees Passion, pride, love, fortune, prestige, praise ties through "me" How will they go and let "me" free? Eight noble paths were disclosed to all thee Mindfulness, selfless will lead all to glee To be or not to be Then all will go and set to free ... Thursday 17.31h, January 31, 2013
31 มกราคม 2556 18:10 น. - comment id 1254483
To: K. Dao Appreciated :) with your kind reply with this beautiful villanelleI'm so glad that they're at least some people who read my poem, not just none
So I feel really glad every time I receive any reply for those of my poems. To: K. Dao and everyone who came here I thank you very much for coming in and read my poem :)
31 มกราคม 2556 18:20 น. - comment id 1254484
Correction (2nd and 6th)To be or not to be The thought's clinging within me When will it go or to set free? Desire, Hatred and Delusion are spreading spree However, whoever may touch, smell, taste, hear and see To be or not to be Happiness, hardly-ness, outcome of the deeds come consequently Birth, death, rebirth, re-death are rolling to eternity When can we go and set free? Heavenly living're most people's wish and plea But, human being could rebirth as a flea To be or not to be Friends, lovers, families bind through the knees Passion, pride, love, fortune, prestige, praise ties through "me" How will they go and let "me" free? Eight noble paths were disclosed to all thee Mindfulness, selflessness will lead all to glee To be or not to be Then all will go and set to free ...
31 มกราคม 2556 18:23 น. - comment id 1254485
Actually, I've just realized that my habit of thinking a line with 7~9 syllables from Thai poem (mostly, I write 'กลอนแปด', so it's kind of build this habit up insensibly) really did transfer to my English poem too. It can actually be seen in 'Blue Villanelle' which I've just realized about it after reread it again and again so many times.
31 มกราคม 2556 18:30 น. - comment id 1254486
Your English poem with Thai atmosphere is so sweet and smooth (to my Thai sense
31 มกราคม 2556 18:31 น. - comment id 1254487
Thank you
หน้าส่วนตัว
กลอนอกหัก รักหวานซึ้ง
กลอนอวยพร
กลอนให้กำลังใจ
กลอนให้ข้อคิด
